Wednesday, February 2, 2011

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     Bored, lonely, and sitting at home with a bunch of old people isn't what Lilita thought she would be doing during her spring break. But since her parents love her so much they thought she needed some guidance since she got a C- in her Chemistry (which isn't all that bad since the highest grade was a B-). But no. Lilita's parents didn't want C's, or B's, they wanted all A+ children and Lilita was threatening to ruin that. 
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  1. RafaelFebruary 7, 2011 at 12:37 PM

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  2. RafaelFebruary 8, 2011 at 3:27 PM

    Annie I like the beginning of the story it will get the reader to question about it. A question I have is are the old people grand parents or aunts and uncles or are they relatives another question is does Lilita have any problems at school or at home? For polishing you should talk about the character Lilita and talk about her character traits.

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